Lit & The Arts Found these poems, Who by? What do you think?

Discussion in 'Literature & The Arts' started by bigdanprice, Oct 24, 2004.

  1. bigdanprice

    bigdanprice New Member

    Found these on the net anyone now who they are by? What do you think?

    I
    We are the friends than never can be,
    So close that all is impossible,
    Its like carrying a rare precious gift
    Of glass so easily broken by other thoughts

    Sitting across the room,
    I want to cross the line,
    Leave consequence in its seat.
    Make this love complete.

    I wish I were as brave as you,
    To fight the feelings that can
    Never
    end.



    II
    Now every song has a meaning,
    That wasn’t there before.
    Every voice a truth
    It makes me feel a different way
    Something you have let loose

    From the birds in the trees
    To people in the street
    Walkin round living lives
    They all seem to be talking about what lies beneath

    An amazingly different feeling,
    Love combined with pain
    Beauty mixed with truth ,will they ever sing the same again?
     
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  2. junior_smith

    junior_smith Premium Member

    i hope you didnt write them because i dont particularily like them. they lack something for me. a hidden meaning a pantameter and an overall poetic feel.
     
  3. DreamLandMafia

    DreamLandMafia Premium Member

    A link to the site tha tyou got them from would be a good start?
     
  4. bigdanprice

    bigdanprice New Member

    I didnt write them, I didnt find them on a web site just in a corrupt file on a computer at Uni, just wondering what the hell they are?
     
  5. amantine

    amantine Premium Member

    I could find nothing on google, which means we can rule out most music lyrics. There's not much rhyming, so I think it's pretty modern. The rhythm is also a bit strange, surely not dactylic hexameter or another classic metrum. But then again, classic metra are almost impossible to do in germanic languages.
     
  6. It is a little boring, and seems the writer is in need of some "pizzazz."
    The poem needs something. I agree with the other person.:p
     
  7. Subdued

    Subdued Emotional Wreckage Premium Member

    Well, those might be just a translation. The poems might have been originally in some other language.
     
  8. oddtodd

    oddtodd Premium Member

    sounds like a self loathing love poem to me . Wallflower (maybe a computer nerd?) looking across the cubicles to his or her dream .

    The line : "I wish I was as brave as you , to fight the feelings..." kind of throws me a bit . As if the accepted norm is to fight your true feelings .

    Kinda mushy , but understandable , we all have those songs , sounds , smells and images that take us back to that one person we never pursued . ( at least I do )